Comments on: Song-A-Week #26: Two Things

By: jacobeck

jacobeck — Tue, 28 Aug 2007 06:05:16 +0000

i like it matty…
thats all.

By: John

John — Tue, 21 Aug 2007 23:56:05 +0000

lyrically, i think this is one of your strongest songs. the lines that chase mentioned especially. however, musically i’m just not feeling it that much. to me it seems too straightforward. i would maybe try one of those things where you record a whole bunch of parts not making full chords and then take out the acoustic or bring it really low in the mix.
i do think that the life is a journey line is a bit hokey…i think you could word that better. the melody on this song is good too and it would probably sound really good with a driving beat behind it. maybe something like interpol…a real tight beat matched with bass.

By: Chase

Chase — Fri, 17 Aug 2007 06:17:26 +0000

I like the melody on this song. I think it could be sped up a few bpms. I think it would be kind of cool too, a fast poppy, perhaps driving song wth depressing lyrics. Very Good-esque. Ending of the song seems kind of out of place to me with the emphasized “down to the minor chord” part. Not really bad, but seems like it needs to be elsewhere earlier in the song for it to make more sense at the end. I think the repeat of the verse/chorus at the end could be nixed and the song would still be good. Seems a little long to me. But then again, with some more production could work.
I think “don’t you know you’re head is a liar” could be rendered “heart” and maybe be more accurate. It seems, at least with me, that the dissatisfaction with life is more emotional than it is logical. I feel slighted because I’m not making as much money as I feel I deserve, am as important or doing as important of things as I think I am and should be, etc. Just a thought.
Tin wings turning to dust is some serious shit. It sounds like you’re using too strong of a stringent…